Exitium Discussion

[Gojira21]

Next chapter it ups as it will be a two parter as it is important! Mystery will be answered and new ones will arise enjoy!

[Flygon King]

Oh good grevious... those poor souls don't know what they're dealing wi-

*Suddenly can't talk.*

[Gojira21]

Kanna got your tongue? lol

[King Caesar]

Read the first new part. It looks like Parker is down and out. Bummer. Lol good job, but I will say the narration seems to be more of a stream of conscious rather than traditional narration. I don't know of it was intentional; I just thought I should point it out.

[Gojira21]

Yeap, and there is more deaths to come...ah yea ive noticed that, its a rather tacky habbit i have-_- lol thanks for pointing it out thought

[Gojira21]

Part 2 is up! Now i did not get into of the big reveal on answering stuff as that last bit dragged outlonger than i had thought BUT Chp 17 is all about answers! which will probably be up shortly alsol

[GodzillavsJason]

Nice chapter dude and finally the gang is all here! I'm having cravings for more!

[Gojira21]

Ahh not yet! There is still Kiko and KC group out there!! lol but dont worry they will be joing them soon enough, and oh there be more soon:)

[Flygon King]

Teaming up with Kanna might seem like a good idea... but is it?

*Lightning clashes.*

[Gojira21]

Hmmm...only time will tell Flygon lol

[King Caesar]

Ahh not yet! There is still Kiko and KC group out there!! lol but dont worry they will be joing them soon enough, and oh there be more soon:)

Hell yeah, there better be more of me!

I've read the first two parts of chapter 16. Pretty good stuff. However, I noticed some repeated run-on sentences and use of that annoying little word "just". Look out for that next time.

[Gojira21]

Ah, thats probably what i get for actually rushing out this chapter so fast and looking over much lol but thanks, once again, KC for pointing that out

[Gojira21]

Well Chp 17 is up! Answers are given (Or maybe made more mysterious? Hmmmm...), a traitors emerges and someone dies! Read on to find out

[kikomia]

Wait a second..who is Jaxon?

[Gojira21]

Lol you been reading the store this whole time, and now ask who Jaxon is? He is the Captain of the team sent into the city!

[Flygon King]

Curse you, Theo! CURSE YOU!!!

Nice new chapter. Indeed, more than a few questions are answered... but Kann aonly becomes more mysterious... or does she?

[kikomia]

Lol you been reading the store this whole time, and now ask who Jaxon is? He is the Captain of the team sent into the city!

He wasn't that important to me....

[Gojira21]

haha, thank you and...yes she does become more mysterious in the end ...her arch of definition only expands and will be continued in the sequel! BUT she will get a moment to shine by end of this story...PLUS there is only 3 chps left!

@Kikomia eh well i guess that was the point lol he was supposed to be just a minor character but i sort of wrote more and more about him!...dont worry he is not taking the spot light from your character!:)

[GodzillavsJason]

Well Mogu is dead and I have a feeling you killed him off just because he doesn't come here anymore. But awesome twist dude never expected Theo to betray the team. Can't wait to see more

[Gojira21]

Ha, you i actually never noticed that he didnt come anymore lol mainly killed him off because i just never fit him in the story very well...haha a surprise eh? never gave much away in the story to show anyone of being a traitor and...well more people are going to die before the end