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Re: The Big One Discussion.

Postby Saw-U-In-1/2 » Tue Mar 20, 2012 12:51 pm

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The post better come with sprinkles. The rainbow ones. *checks post, glares at Saw* No sprinkles. *cocks shotgun*

But, all kidding aside, i was impressed. Like how it's more than just punch-punch-jab-jab. There are calmer parts and good introductions to monsters (ie Sanda, Gaira). Good work


As always, your comments never cease to help me out.

Still, I felt that parts of my story seem a little rushed.

Which areas do you feel could use some work?
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Re: The Big One Discussion.

Postby Saw-U-In-1/2 » Tue Mar 20, 2012 12:52 pm

MothraRocks wrote:Awesome, Gamera and Gyaos have joined the fray 8-)


Pretty soon, two more monsters will enter the fray.
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Re: The Big One Discussion.

Postby King Caesar » Tue Mar 20, 2012 1:47 pm

Truthfully, Saw, I don't know how else to help. Maybe consider the use of effective figurative language more often, or at least when trying to describe something. That's honestly all I can think of
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Re: The Big One Discussion.

Postby Saw-U-In-1/2 » Wed Mar 21, 2012 1:17 pm

King Caesar wrote:Truthfully, Saw, I don't know how else to help. Maybe consider the use of effective figurative language more often, or at least when trying to describe something. That's honestly all I can think of


Thank you for the help, KC.

Now if you'll excuse me, I have some things to fix.
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Re: The Big One Discussion.

Postby Venom 2009 » Wed Mar 21, 2012 11:47 pm

Wow! This fight is going to get bigger as the Tachyon race are going to enter the battle!

Keep up the good work! :D
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Re: The Big One Discussion.

Postby Saw-U-In-1/2 » Thu Mar 22, 2012 6:51 am

You guys wouldn't mind if I gave each chapter its own title, would you?
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Re: The Big One Discussion.

Postby Saw-U-In-1/2 » Thu Mar 22, 2012 6:52 am

Venom 2009 wrote:Wow! This fight is going to get bigger as the Tachyon race are going to enter the battle!

Keep up the good work! :D


I'll do my best. :D

Thank you very much and enjoy the rest of the show.
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Re: The Big One Discussion.

Postby King Caesar » Thu Mar 22, 2012 6:59 am

Saw-U-In-1/2 wrote:You guys wouldn't mind if I gave each chapter its own title, would you?

No, not at all. Go ahead and do what you wanna do. 8-)
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Re: The Big One Discussion.

Postby Saw-U-In-1/2 » Thu Mar 22, 2012 9:18 am

Okay, I'll start labeling my chapters.

Also, enjoy the next part.
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Re: The Big One Discussion.

Postby Saw-U-In-1/2 » Thu Mar 22, 2012 10:28 am

This newest twist is special for you, Mothrarocks.

Hope you like it.
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Re: The Big One Discussion.

Postby Saw-U-In-1/2 » Thu Mar 22, 2012 11:14 am

Hope you guys like the new post. :twisted:
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Re: The Big One Discussion.

Postby Venom 2009 » Fri Mar 23, 2012 9:11 am

Saw-U-In-1/2 wrote:Hope you guys like the new post. :twisted:


Awesome Chapter! :huge:

Now we got the Tacyhon race and the Gyaos species in the battle!
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Re: The Big One Discussion.

Postby Saw-U-In-1/2 » Fri Mar 23, 2012 9:45 am

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Saw-U-In-1/2 wrote:Hope you guys like the new post. :twisted:


Awesome Chapter! :huge:

Now we got the Tacyhon race and the Gyaos species in the battle!


Thank you.

It's going to be grand.

Grand indeed. :twisted:
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Re: The Big One Discussion.

Postby Godzilla1703 » Fri Mar 23, 2012 6:52 pm

Nice part but Gomora, NOOOOOO
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Re: The Big One Discussion.

Postby Saw-U-In-1/2 » Mon Mar 26, 2012 4:53 pm

Hey, guys.

Just wanted to tell you that you're a great audience and love the fact you like my writing.

Really makes writing much more fun. ;)

I'm taking a small break from this story for awhile.

Got to get some school stuff done.

Will be back soon.
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Re: The Big One Discussion.

Postby Saw-U-In-1/2 » Tue Mar 27, 2012 7:13 am

Here's a new post.

Will be the last one for awhile.

I'll continue it soon.
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Re: The Big One Discussion.

Postby Saw-U-In-1/2 » Wed Mar 28, 2012 8:58 am

Well here's some more and another post.

Me personally, the final part of the post is one of my favorite sections of the story. :twisted:

Hope you guys like it so far.
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Re: The Big One Discussion.

Postby SpanishBulldog63 » Wed Mar 28, 2012 10:25 am

Damn,Orga's turning into quite the badass.i can't wait to see how that progresses.
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Re: The Big One Discussion.

Postby Saw-U-In-1/2 » Wed Mar 28, 2012 11:07 am

SpanishBulldog63 wrote:Damn,Orga's turning into quite the badass.i can't wait to see how that progresses.


Oh it will be a big surprise. :twisted:

I personally can't wait to get to it.

Hope it will be great.

I decided to bring him back since I like him.
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Re: The Big One Discussion.

Postby Saw-U-In-1/2 » Wed Mar 28, 2012 12:12 pm

Enjoy the next part.

Be warned: it's not for the faint of heart.
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