Godzilla: The Arrival Disscussion Board

[King Caesar]

Which is plausible. If I really wanted this to go my way (which I would prefer it wouldn't, but...) I would want Needlar to go rogue. Thats just me though.

Oh my gawsh...we're arguing over an FF. What TF?!

[GodzillavsJason]

Thanks guys im glad you really liked it and you guys are arguing what will happen to King Ghidorah well it will happen after this next intermission chapter that i'll be finishing up when i get back from school.

[GodzillavsJason]

Two Intermission chapters are up and sorry that they were a bit short but i'll post a new chapter today and i hope you enjoy both of them!

[MothraRocks]

Nice new chapters man

[King Caesar]

Good. I liked the second one better (bittersweet endings are always pleasant to read). One complaint that has been building up for a while now is the use of the word "As". Find a different way to cobsteuct your sentences so you're not dependent on that word. Otherwise, it was great.

[GodzillavsZilla]

awsome new chapters , sad to see Godzilla's dead

[King Caesar]

^ It's not canon! He's still alive. That was like a cut scene; it wasn't the actual ending. It was just an non-canon alternate.

[GodzillavsJason]

@everyone thanks guys im glad you liked those two little chapters and yes the one where Godzilla dies is not cannon as you can see wh it was cut later as somethings wouldn't have made sense if Godzilla died.

PS Also sorry i coulden't get a new chapter up yesterday because its going to be a long and interesting chapter so yeah its going to be really good.

@King Caesar ok i'll try stop using those damn as lol but what do you suggest what i should use moe then those as?

[King Caesar]

Vary your sentence structure a little bit. Use different conjunctions such as "While", "Though", "Yet", "And", and "Or". Also consider some prepositional phrases like "On the other hand..." or "While ___ was ___, ...". A little sprucing up never hurt.

[GodzillavsJason]

Vary your sentence structure a little bit. Use different conjunctions such as "While", "Though", "Yet", "And", and "Or". Also consider some prepositional phrases like "On the other hand..." or "While ___ was ___, ...". A little sprucing up never hurt.

thanks dude those will be handy now when i get home im going to finish the rest of the chapter, read it and then post it.

[King Caesar]

Well you can bet you're bottom dollar I'll be here to read it!

[kikomia]

Nice new chapters

[GodzillavsJason]

New Chapter is up! I hope you all like it!

[Flygon King]

Yes... this story is coming together quite nicely... very nicely indeed...

[MothraRocks]

Liking the new chapter Doglas is awesome. Oh....





MOTHRA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

!!!!!!!!111!!!!!!

[GodzillavsJason]

Liking the new chapter Doglas is awesome. Oh....





MOTHRA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

!!!!!!!!111!!!!!!

Thanks dude im glad you liked it Also Doglas is awesome and what did you think of King Ghidorah and some of the others' forms.

[MothraRocks]

I think it's funny he and his other forms simply fight, but Keizer is a jerk

[GodzillavsJason]

I think it's funny he and his other forms simply fight, but Keizer is a jerk

yep that Keizer is a jerk lol. also just a little spoiler that you'll all most likely guessed is that next chapter is just basically a small little civil war.

[MothraRocks]

Lol, yeah, I knew that already

[GodzillavsZilla]

like the new chapter and the reversed MKG