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Postby GodzillavsZilla » Sun Aug 07, 2011 6:50 pm

Ok this is the discussion for Godzilla: Return of the Xillens, the sequal for Godzilla, Anguirus, and Varan Giant Monsters All- Out Attack, so discuss about my new fan fict :mrgreen:
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Re: Godzilla: Return of the Xillens discussion

Postby kikomia » Sun Aug 07, 2011 6:51 pm

Good like it so far :D
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Re: Godzilla: Return of the Xillens discussion

Postby GodzillavsJason » Sun Aug 07, 2011 7:35 pm

It was good i liked it but it was a little too short but other than that it was good. :mrgreen:
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Re: Godzilla: Return of the Xillens discussion

Postby King Caesar » Mon Aug 08, 2011 4:58 am

Not bad. I know I always nitpick something, but this irked me for some peculiar reason. Yuri was a city girl, and I believe she and her father lived in an apartment. Unless she moved out to the country, the whole thing seems phony.

You don't need to change it though. Just thought I should mention it. ;)
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Re: Godzilla: Return of the Xillens discussion

Postby Gojira21 » Mon Aug 08, 2011 1:35 pm

I enoyed it so far sounds good 8-) oh and KC have ya read my newest chapter lately? eh??????? lol
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Re: Godzilla: Return of the Xillens discussion

Postby GodzillavsZilla » Sat Aug 20, 2011 1:34 pm

new chapter's up hope you guys like it! :mrgreen:
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Re: Godzilla: Return of the Xillens discussion

Postby GodzillavsJason » Sat Aug 20, 2011 1:39 pm

GodzillavsZilla wrote:new chapter's up hope you guys like it! :mrgreen:


awesome new chapter and cliffhanger dude really good. :mrgreen:
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Re: Godzilla: Return of the Xillens discussion

Postby King Caesar » Sat Aug 20, 2011 2:15 pm

Damn that last scene has so much potential! You could've written a book about the tension between the two races!! Gaaaaa!!!

Nice addition though.
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Re: Godzilla: Return of the Xillens discussion

Postby MothraRocks » Sat Aug 20, 2011 2:46 pm

Nice chapter! Wasn't expecting seatopi, and I'm loving all the alien races! Keep it up!
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Re: Godzilla: Return of the Xillens discussion

Postby GodzillavsZilla » Fri Sep 09, 2011 8:06 pm

new chapter's up :mrgreen:
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Re: Godzilla: Return of the Xillens discussion

Postby GodzillavsJason » Fri Sep 09, 2011 8:10 pm

Awesome chapter dude! :mrgreen: really good how your going to have the black hole aliens and the xilliens working together. :mrgreen: also your story is begining to sound a little like mine on a few aspects like with Yuri and Akane knowining each other and Godzilla being in ice by Antartica. now be honest were you inspired by my fan fics. im not mad at you i just wanna know if they inspired you. :mrgreen:
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Re: Godzilla: Return of the Xillens discussion

Postby King Caesar » Sat Sep 10, 2011 2:55 am

No love for the Kilaakians I see. ._. Decent addition, a little too quickly paced. Lacked much descriptive filling, but dialogue was well-executed.
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Re: Godzilla: Return of the Xillens discussion

Postby MothraRocks » Sat Sep 10, 2011 3:53 am

Nice chapter, but yeah, like KC said, was a bit short and quick paced, and throw in a bit more description.
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Re: Godzilla: Return of the Xillens discussion

Postby GodzillavsZilla » Sat Sep 10, 2011 6:28 am

GodzillavsJason wrote:Awesome chapter dude! :mrgreen: really good how your going to have the black hole aliens and the xilliens working together. :mrgreen: also your story is begining to sound a little like mine on a few aspects like with Yuri and Akane knowining each other and Godzilla being in ice by Antartica. now be honest were you inspired by my fan fics. im not mad at you i just wanna know if they inspired you. :mrgreen:

well actually I thought of Yuri and Akane being friends before you started Godzilla: A New Begining and Godzilla being in ice was inspired by Godzilla Final Wars. sorry
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Re: Godzilla: Return of the Xillens discussion

Postby GodzillavsZilla » Sat Sep 17, 2011 9:37 am

New chapter's up hope you guys like it. :mrgreen:
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Re: Godzilla: Return of the Xillens discussion

Postby GodzillavsJason » Sat Sep 17, 2011 10:07 am

GodzillavsZilla wrote:New chapter's up hope you guys like it. :mrgreen:


it was good my only problem was that it was a bit too short but good none the less. also i wished that GOdzilla really did kill Spongebob. :sigh:
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Re: Godzilla: Return of the Xillens discussion

Postby King Caesar » Sat Sep 17, 2011 10:11 am

Cute little bit of humor. Interested to see who this Mega Beetle character is. :D
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Re: Godzilla: Return of the Xillens discussion

Postby MothraRocks » Sat Sep 17, 2011 10:39 am

Nice chapter, but could have been a bit longer. Liked the spongebob reference lol.
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Re: Godzilla: Return of the Xillens discussion

Postby GodzillavsZilla » Sat Oct 22, 2011 7:41 am

new chapter's up, hope you like it. :mrgreen:
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Re: Godzilla: Return of the Xillens discussion

Postby King Caesar » Sat Oct 22, 2011 8:21 am

He tried to fly up, but he was too hurt. King Kong roared at the pterotactyl, insisting he should stay until he healed. The pterotactyl agreed and sat down.

Huh? Thats odd...

He said his name was Rodan. King Kong shook his head and went to sleep.

...hmm...

Improvement needed, but it had a somewhat interesting plot. I have a fever, and the only prescription is more detail.
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