Godzilla: The Evil Inside Series discussion & suggestions

[Godzilla1703]

My new fan fic and series....discuss & suggest here...

[Grayshot954]

Good story so far but there are multiple spelling errors and gramatical errors. Other then that, very good.

[Godzilla1703]

thanks for letting me know, ill fix those and thanks

[Godzilla1703]

Good story so far but there are multiple spelling errors and gramatical errors. Other then that, very good.

fixed and do u have any suggestions for it

[Gojira21]

Interesting....Like Grayshot954 said had some spelling mistakes but i see you fixed them, thats good. Another thing is can try to add little bit more detail, but i like this one. Keep it up!

[Godzilla1703]

thanks, i try to add detail...i really do

[Gojira21]

I know, man. It takes practice, as you gain more experience with writting you get better at details. Took me a long time too

[Godzilla1703]

k man

[King Caesar]

I know, man. It takes practice, as you gain more experience with writting you get better at details. Took me a long time too

Exactly. Writing and time go hand in hand like the sun and the earth (great comparison, I know). It'll take practice and determination. There is no end to learning how to master writing. I still have a long way to go, but the journey is half the fun. Don't ever give up.

Now that that philosophical outburst has left my system, it was a nice intro. Like the mid control idea and the whole test by destroying a mountain. Maybe just a touch more of detail here and there, and you should be set

[Godzilla1703]

I know, man. It takes practice, as you gain more experience with writting you get better at details. Took me a long time too

Exactly. Writing and time go hand in hand like the sun and the earth (great comparison, I know). It'll take practice and determination. There is no end to learning how to master writing. I still have a long way to go, but the journey is half the fun. Don't ever give up.

Now that that philosophical outburst has left my system, it was a nice intro. Like the mid control idea and the whole test by destroying a mountain. Maybe just a touch more of detail here and there, and you should be set

you sir are a artist

[Gojira21]

I like the new part, pretty short, but defiantly did better job with detail!!! Keep it up!

[Godzilla1703]

extended it and thanks also, as he said NEW PARTS UP!! Go check it out

[King Caesar]

Seeped probably wasn't the best personification for 'evil' in that situation, but it's a start. Not to bad, just amplify the emotions and make it longer (das ist was Sie sagt).

[Gojira21]

(das ist was Sie sagt).

what in the world is that?

[King Caesar]

It's German and literally means "That's what she said."

[Gojira21]

Wow, so we have Spanish, Japanese, and German! This is turning into the foreign language thread lol

[Godzilla1703]

lol...

[King Caesar]

lol...

... Well, uh, are there any more characters besides the girl Xilien and the Leader?

[Gojira21]

Im sure he will add more

[GodzillavsJason]

The story is ok so far but you really really really need to make your chapters longer, thats how you'll attract more readers to read your stories dude but other than that your getting to a good start.