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Re: Beginning Writers Teaser Comments Thread

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2004Zilla wrote:
Kubo wrote:That second trailer, GoJi... I'm not sure what the point was or what was even happening...
Seconded. Who's Lucario? Who's Xeno? Who's Hagar? What's anything?
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Kubo wrote:
2004Zilla wrote:
Kubo wrote:That second trailer, GoJi... I'm not sure what the point was or what was even happening...
Seconded. Who's Lucario? Who's Xeno? Who's Hagar? What's anything?
What is life even?
Shrek is life. :P
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2004Zilla wrote:
Kubo wrote:That second trailer, GoJi... I'm not sure what the point was or what was even happening...
Seconded. Who's Lucario? Who's Xeno? Who's Hagar? What's anything?
H.A Hagar-New enemy

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After months of inactivity and brooding, I've finally decided to try and get back into writing. But rather then update one of my old fanfics, I thought I'd start something fresh.

And so ladies and jellymen, I give you the teaser for Mechagodzilla Generations.
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@GOJIISBACK

You need to work on the dialogue. That felt extremely cheesy.

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@Birdman

That was very nice. I quite liked the suspenseful dialogue, addition to Serizawa's initial speech, ETC. Only thing that could be worked on is the scenes encased in Asterisks(*), maybe something like
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So you're working in three narratives at once, or what? Sorta unsure based on the teaser.
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Not gonna dock any points for this, GoJi, but we could see some actual content soon? There's a lot of teasers and nothing coming from it?
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Kubo, that was FUCKING AWESOME!
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Haha, thanks man. Glad you liked it. :)
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Kubo wrote:Haha, thanks man. Glad you liked it. :)
I wanna see that shit, and I don't even like reading FFs. Can't wait.
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Good job shippersdreamer but you have to post in the beginning writer's section.

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Biogoji wrote:Good job shippersdreamer but you have to post in the beginning writer's section.
I already told him.
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Added a teaser, kind of a rewriting of an old story I did but replacing some of the characters with new ones.
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gigandude wrote:Added a teaser, kind of a rewriting of an old story I did but replacing some of the characters with new ones.
I noticed, neat shit.
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And I saw YOUR teaser, Wisper. Very nice. Reminds me of something Giratina would do. Does it have a title?
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Kubo wrote:And I saw YOUR teaser, Wisper. Very nice. Reminds me of something Giratina would do. Does it have a title?
It has a developmental title, but I might change it eventually.
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Trailer is up for my new story idea.

I hope you all enjoy it.
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Not sure I'm allowed o post in this thread because of me being a beginner but the Friday the 13h Fan boy inside of me freaked out at the end so I'm looking forward to it.
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Lethal Weapon wrote:Not sure I'm allowed o post in this thread because of me being a beginner but the Friday the 13h Fan boy inside of me freaked out at the end so I'm looking forward to it.
Even though you're a beginner, beginners are still allowed to post in discussion boards and the teaser comments on the regular section. They just can't post a story in the regular station until authorized to do so.

OT: I'm really glad you liked it so far as there's more to come with a discussion board being posted soon. :D
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