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Beginning Writers Teaser Comments Thread

Posted: Wed Sep 17, 2014 5:56 pm
by Biogoji
Companion thread to my teaser thread, this where you can comment on teasers, not in the Teaser threads itself.

Re: Beginning Writers Teaser Comments Thread

Posted: Fri Sep 19, 2014 9:45 pm
by 2004Zilla
Biogoji wrote:So in the Forum that everyone that's better than you in everyway........ I mean the experienced writers use

What the hell? Did you really have to post something this rude?

Re: Beginning Writers Teaser Comments Thread

Posted: Fri Sep 19, 2014 9:56 pm
by GodzillavsJason
Let's stop.

I deleted the stuff that would make people mad. So let's knock this poop off and if i see anyone discussing this from any angle then I will report you to the mods.

Besides these two threads are where you post your teasers and comment. There's not going to be another place in this section for this type of thing. Get use to it.

Re: Beginning Writers Teaser Comments Thread

Posted: Sun Sep 21, 2014 3:50 pm
by 2004Zilla
Saansilt wrote:Okay, so my teaser is up.
Toughts?

Fix the spelling errors. Besides that, it's pretty good.

Re: Beginning Writers Teaser Comments Thread

Posted: Mon Sep 22, 2014 5:04 am
by Kubo
I enjoyed it. Got a nice bit of tension and action and doesn't spoil everything about the plot! Good job!

Re: Beginning Writers Teaser Comments Thread

Posted: Mon Oct 06, 2014 3:08 pm
by SenseiTeriyakiV
GojiraFan333 wrote:Toholandia: The Adventure Begins Teaser is up! Not much,but any thoughts?

Add more suspense, drama. Make the dialogue feel like its coming from a real person, maybe. Try not to just stick every detail in without breaks. Maybe add in a a place where the character takes a sip of water, or something.

Re: Beginning Writers Teaser Comments Thread

Posted: Thu Oct 16, 2014 8:36 am
by Kubo
FOUR seems like a shitload of wat. So many things happening, so many creatures...it was a bit confusing to follow.

Re: Beginning Writers Teaser Comments Thread

Posted: Thu Oct 16, 2014 9:00 am
by toho_guy01
Goji, you didn't really do very good on the teaser for FOUR. Oh well, you are not going to listen to us anyway and just make THREE, TWO, TWO AND A HALF, SIX, SEVEN, ONE AND A QUARTER and ZERO anyway.

Re: Beginning Writers Teaser Comments Thread

Posted: Thu Oct 16, 2014 10:58 am
by 2004Zilla
Yeah there's to many creatures from different franchises. When you're doing a crossover, you need a lot more backstory than what you provide.

Re: Beginning Writers Teaser Comments Thread

Posted: Thu Oct 16, 2014 11:14 am
by Kubo
toho_guy01 wrote:Goji, you didn't really do very good on the teaser for FOUR. Oh well, you are not going to listen to us anyway and just make THREE, TWO, TWO AND A HALF, SIX, SEVEN, ONE AND A QUARTER and ZERO anyway.

Try and refrain from that kinda talk, lest you want the greenies (and the blue man dressed in green) to get you.

Re: Beginning Writers Teaser Comments Thread

Posted: Thu Oct 16, 2014 11:33 am
by GodzillavsJason
toho_guy01 wrote:Goji, you didn't really do very good on the teaser for FOUR. Oh well, you are not going to listen to us anyway and just make THREE, TWO, TWO AND A HALF, SIX, SEVEN, ONE AND A QUARTER and ZERO anyway.



Toho you need to calm down.

Re: Beginning Writers Teaser Comments Thread

Posted: Fri Oct 17, 2014 6:59 am
by GodzillavsJason
Damnit Gojifan333! What did I tell you about one word posts!

You're on strike two with me right now. Do this again and I'm automatically warning you to the moderators since you keep breaking that rule.

Re: Beginning Writers Teaser Comments Thread

Posted: Fri Oct 17, 2014 12:49 pm
by GodzillavsJason
SpanishBulldog63 wrote:
GojiraFan333 wrote:
SpanishBulldog63 wrote:GojiraFan333, just be honest about situations like that, because once you're post is caught, an edit won't fool very many here.(read: yes I know you edited your post)


Okay. I guess I'm sorry, then. BUT if you watched GojiraFan333: The Movie it's all about editing and not being honest.

Big thanks to Gigan for giving me the idea.


You should probably thank him for this verbal warning too: Any more snarky comments like that, and it's a warning, comprende?


He'll get more than a warning if he keeps this poop up.

Re: Beginning Writers Teaser Comments Thread

Posted: Fri Oct 17, 2014 12:55 pm
by GodzillavsJason
Enough! We're ending this discussion once in for all.

This thread is for commenting on teasers so let's keep it at that.

Re: Beginning Writers Teaser Comments Thread

Posted: Sat Nov 29, 2014 3:05 am
by GoJiSbAcK
What the skreeonk happened here?

Anyway, my teaser is up.

Re: Beginning Writers Teaser Comments Thread

Posted: Sat Nov 29, 2014 6:05 am
by Kubo
Irrelevant what happened here. Your teaser tho.

I didn't know Jason could speak? It's a bit surprising. And the fact thats he jailed by humans is kinda weird too. But I'll sit on my hands until I see the true story.

Re: Beginning Writers Teaser Comments Thread

Posted: Sat Nov 29, 2014 8:59 am
by GoJiSbAcK
Thanks for the feedback, Gigan and Kubo!

I'll edit that Voorhees mistake after this. I know that it's strange that Jason can speak but I wanted something........different.

Re: Beginning Writers Teaser Comments Thread

Posted: Sat Nov 29, 2014 9:09 am
by GoJiSbAcK
Saansilt wrote:Is this one going to be completed?


Yes, defiantly. Sorry about the last one.

Re: Beginning Writers Teaser Comments Thread

Posted: Sat Nov 29, 2014 3:07 pm
by Kubo
What kind of affiliations does Voorhees have with Slender Man? Hmm...

Re: Beginning Writers Teaser Comments Thread

Posted: Sun Nov 30, 2014 12:42 pm
by GoJiSbAcK
OK, guys, befor you get excited about FT13TH: JVS, I want to release The Crusaders! an adult comedy.

Features the origin of Mr.STFU.