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Postby Stick Wars » Fri Sep 16, 2011 8:15 pm

To discuss my new fan fiction "Stick Wars".
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Re: Stick Wars Discussion

Postby GodzillavsJason » Fri Sep 16, 2011 8:16 pm

aren't you going to give us more detail?
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Re: Stick Wars Discussion

Postby Stick Wars » Fri Sep 16, 2011 8:17 pm

I've posted the topic already.
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Re: Stick Wars Discussion

Postby GodzillavsJason » Fri Sep 16, 2011 8:21 pm

the first chapter was interesting but for some reason i thought it was going to be like a robot chicken parody but anyway it was good. :)
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Re: Stick Wars Discussion

Postby Stick Wars » Fri Sep 16, 2011 8:22 pm

Thanks :D
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Re: Stick Wars Discussion

Postby Mogu » Fri Sep 16, 2011 9:18 pm

Nice story man!
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Re: Stick Wars Discussion

Postby King Caesar » Fri Sep 16, 2011 9:19 pm

This could have been expanded upon a bit more. Plus new dialogue (or people that talk) should create a new paragraph. I'm not really a fan of the present-tense narration you used in this, but it worked out okay. I'd give it a 6/10
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Re: Stick Wars Discussion

Postby Stick Wars » Fri Sep 16, 2011 9:39 pm

@Mogu: Thanks!

@King Ceaser: I'm still working on giving more characters. These were just the first ones. And I'll try to make it past tense too. Thanks and I was waiting for people to find mistakes.
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Re: Stick Wars Discussion

Postby King Caesar » Fri Sep 16, 2011 9:40 pm

No problem. That's what imma here for. ;)

Oh and it's Caesar, not Ceaser. 8-) lol
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Re: Stick Wars Discussion

Postby Stick Wars » Fri Sep 16, 2011 9:41 pm

King Caesar wrote:No problem. That's what imma here for. ;)

Oh and it's Caesar, not Ceaser. 8-) lol

Oops..... ;)
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Re: Stick Wars Discussion

Postby Stick Wars » Sun Sep 18, 2011 3:16 am

Chapter 2 is up.
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Re: Stick Wars Discussion

Postby King Caesar » Sun Sep 18, 2011 4:20 am

Dunno if this is intentional or not, but I felt like this was almost just a summary, not an actual story. There was minimal description, and the fights were incredibly fast-paced, too fast. Just keep that in mind when writing chapter 3.

Cool concept though.
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Re: Stick Wars Discussion

Postby Stick Wars » Mon Sep 19, 2011 2:52 am

Chapter 3 up!
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Re: Stick Wars Discussion

Postby Mogu » Mon Sep 19, 2011 4:19 am

Awesome chapter man!
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Re: Stick Wars Discussion

Postby King Caesar » Mon Sep 19, 2011 4:30 am

Wait!! Stop the presses! Where are those lovable little aliens?! :P

Anyways, same summarization problems as last chapter, but this one was definitely cooler. The "Falcon Punch" thing gave me a laugh.
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Re: Stick Wars Discussion

Postby kikomia » Mon Sep 19, 2011 4:33 am

Wait so Fire and Lighting are rivals, but they make one of them?

Nice chapter BTW :D
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Re: Stick Wars Discussion

Postby King Caesar » Mon Sep 19, 2011 4:39 am

kikomia wrote:Wait so Fire and Lighting are rivals, but they make one of them?


We're in the same world where aliens attack a Stickman Earth, and where guys can carry bazookas and nobody asks why. Just go with it.
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Re: Stick Wars Discussion

Postby kikomia » Mon Sep 19, 2011 4:40 am

King Caesar wrote:
kikomia wrote:Wait so Fire and Lighting are rivals, but they make one of them?


We're in the same world where aliens attack a Stickman earth where guys can carry bazookas and stuff and nobody asks why. Just go with it.


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Re: Stick Wars Discussion

Postby King Caesar » Mon Sep 19, 2011 4:46 am

Grrr...I hate that face, Kikomania... -_- It's so...ugly, for a lack of higher-connotative words.
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Re: Stick Wars Discussion

Postby kikomia » Mon Sep 19, 2011 4:47 am

King Caesar wrote:Grrr...I hate that face, Kikomania... -_- It's so...ugly, for a lack of higher-connotative words.



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