MothraRocks wrote:It was an interesting chapter, but like KC said, u kinda over used the term 'roared in pain', and try to add a bit more description to the fights. Other than that, I thought it was good
MothraRocks wrote:It was good, but try to stick to one tense; you continually switched between past and present. Like how Leo was like " Told ya!" when Destroyah came XD
MothraRocks wrote:Goody, I'm gonna love it, I'm sure
MothraRocks wrote::( not deaths!!
MothraRocks wrote:I bet the next chapter is gonna be awesome, with the last one being the conclusion, right?
MothraRocks wrote:... So I picked Mothra Leo, hoping that would save mothra in your fanfic, but ironicilly I'm the reason she was killed?
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