Seven Voyages a beautiful cruise ship found with most of it's crew dead. But what caused such a terrible turn of events? Follow the Doctor and Rose in this tale on the vessels last voyage and find out what terror resides with in the enigmatic container on the ships lowest deck.
This will be a small Doctor Who/Hp Lovecraft crossover, starting the Ninth Doctor, Rose and some of the ''smaller'' lovecraftian horrors.
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Davros wrote:This is my ultimate victory, Doctor! The destruction of REALITY ITSELF!
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Good story so far and its not often that we see Doctor Who stories here.
Keep up the good work.
Keep up the good work.
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Thank you and new chapter is up.
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Nicely done, pta. I liked the general atmosphere of the ship and its nice to see some original characters going on about in this story.
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New chapter is up.
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New chapter is up.
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Good work pta with both of the newest chapters, I liked them a lot and with the creature running around. This is ought to make it even more suspenseful.
Keep up the good work.
Keep up the good work.
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New chapter is up.
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Quite the suspenseful chapter. I liked the descriptions that worked on for this chapter.
Very well done.
Very well done.
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Thank you good sir.GodzillavsJason wrote:Quite the suspenseful chapter. I liked the descriptions that worked on for this chapter.
Very well done.
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New and final chapter.
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I admit the ending once the Samantha's race comes to pick her up is a little underwhelming as it just seemed abrupt to me as well as the Doctor and Rose not discussing on where to go or what happen. I would also like to suggest that you could have used some word alternatives and/or do you structures a little differently.
However, I did enjoy the whole story as it was suspenseful, had some good dialogue along with making some detailed original characters. Probably the best of Doctor Who fics all around the world (I'm assuming) so all in all quite a good short story that can easily be made into an episode.
Good work, pta like always.
However, I did enjoy the whole story as it was suspenseful, had some good dialogue along with making some detailed original characters. Probably the best of Doctor Who fics all around the world (I'm assuming) so all in all quite a good short story that can easily be made into an episode.
Good work, pta like always.
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