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Re: Beginning Writers Teaser Comments Thread

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2004Zilla wrote:
Kubo wrote:That second trailer, GoJi... I'm not sure what the point was or what was even happening...
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Kubo wrote:
2004Zilla wrote:
Kubo wrote:That second trailer, GoJi... I'm not sure what the point was or what was even happening...
Seconded. Who's Lucario? Who's Xeno? Who's Hagar? What's anything?
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2004Zilla wrote:
Kubo wrote:That second trailer, GoJi... I'm not sure what the point was or what was even happening...
Seconded. Who's Lucario? Who's Xeno? Who's Hagar? What's anything?
H.A Hagar-New enemy

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After months of inactivity and brooding, I've finally decided to try and get back into writing. But rather then update one of my old fanfics, I thought I'd start something fresh.

And so ladies and jellymen, I give you the teaser for Mechagodzilla Generations.
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@GOJIISBACK

You need to work on the dialogue. That felt extremely cheesy.
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@Birdman

That was very nice. I quite liked the suspenseful dialogue, addition to Serizawa's initial speech, ETC. Only thing that could be worked on is the scenes encased in Asterisks(*), maybe something like
*The Mechagodzillas roar, Followed by Legendary godzilla and zilla.*

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So you're working in three narratives at once, or what? Sorta unsure based on the teaser.
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Not gonna dock any points for this, GoJi, but we could see some actual content soon? There's a lot of teasers and nothing coming from it?
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Kubo, that was skreeonking AWESOME!
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Haha, thanks man. Glad you liked it. :)
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Kubo wrote:Haha, thanks man. Glad you liked it. :)
I wanna see that poop, and I don't even like reading FFs. Can't wait.
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Good job shippersdreamer but you have to post in the beginning writer's section.

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Biogoji wrote:Good job shippersdreamer but you have to post in the beginning writer's section.
I already told him.
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Added a teaser, kind of a rewriting of an old story I did but replacing some of the characters with new ones.
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gigandude wrote:Added a teaser, kind of a rewriting of an old story I did but replacing some of the characters with new ones.
I noticed, neat poop.
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And I saw YOUR teaser, Wisper. Very nice. Reminds me of something Giratina would do. Does it have a title?
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Kubo wrote:And I saw YOUR teaser, Wisper. Very nice. Reminds me of something Giratina would do. Does it have a title?
It has a developmental title, but I might change it eventually.
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Trailer is up for my new story idea.

I hope you all enjoy it.
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Not sure I'm allowed o post in this thread because of me being a beginner but the Friday the 13h Fan boy inside of me freaked out at the end so I'm looking forward to it.
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Lethal Weapon wrote:Not sure I'm allowed o post in this thread because of me being a beginner but the Friday the 13h Fan boy inside of me freaked out at the end so I'm looking forward to it.
Even though you're a beginner, beginners are still allowed to post in discussion boards and the teaser comments on the regular section. They just can't post a story in the regular station until authorized to do so.

OT: I'm really glad you liked it so far as there's more to come with a discussion board being posted soon. :D
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