TROS Discussion and Hype. (Made by Saansilt)

[Kubo]

Covered the first three parts. Started off a little shaky, but I can dig the premise. And we have an interesting, distinct villain. I'm loving it.

[Kubo]

The approach was a bit trite. Old lady is gonna get mugged, oh no. Thank heavens the heroes are right there to save the day (just as the bad guys are ready to get dirty). It's a routine that's been done to death, and there wasn't much to separate from any other occasion.

That's not to say the writing was bad in itself. Heck, I think it's pretty good. But try to avoid those clichès (also had similar issue with the tease "gonna let you live but imma kill you actually" in the third chapter. It's not the end of your story--I guarentee you I'm subject to them as well--but do what you can is all im saying.)

[Kubo]

I feel. Okay. Cool, cool. Carry on! ^_^

[Kubo]

Don't forget parts four and five mate.

Never forget.
Only put aside for a later evening.
I shall return.

[Saansilt]

Okay, so this was lost a bit.
I'll have it back in a few.

[GodzillavsJason]

Okay, so this was lost a bit.
I'll have it back in a few.

Did some edits to let people know that this is your story and discussion board.

[Saansilt]

Thank you.

[GodzillavsJason]

The story is good so far, I like the character interactions, the world you have set up and the atmosphere just feels right to me. I really like, however it does have some spelling errors and I believe one or two word repeats, plus some small cliches.

Other than that, this is a really good story so far. Keep it up.