Ernesth's One Shots! Disscussion

[ernesth100]

Well I think its about time I announced this. I've been working on ALOT Of stories during my absence that I'm almost done with. I will post them her in the following order:

-Dust: The Full Story
Info: My fan made continuation to this little story here: http://www.newyorker.com/fiction/featur ... millhauser
-Pheonix vs. Dragon: Inferno Wars-
Info: A story about Dragons at war with Pheonix's. Here's something my version of the Pheonix is actually a dragon whom let the power of The Flame(the inner source of fire for all dragons) consume them becoming the beast ingulfed in flames known as a Pheonix.
-1980-Something Space Guy: Classified Story
Info: A story about Benny the Space Guy from the Lego Movie! But its much more dramatic and serious than the Lego Movie. Its about Bennys experience almost dying in space and trying to get back home to Earth.
-The Life of a Collector.

I may add more one shots but for now this is all.

Story: http://tohokingdom.com/forum/viewtopic.php?f=18&t=17685

[GodzillaFreak99]

Ikay, how can I put this? your story is........lackluster. You need more detail, You need to flush out the situation more, you know? describe Blu and your other characters a bit more, Give more description of their surroundings, and flush out the situation

I'm terrible at giving advice, so bear with me. Not trying to be a jerk here.

[ernesth100]

Blu is Benny from the Lego Move. I thought that would basically describe him for me.

[GodzillaLord]

Blu is Benny from the Lego Move. I thought that would basically describe him for me.

"FACEPALM" their are plenty of Characters named BLU!!!! and even then you didn't describe who the hell he was!!!!!1

[ernesth100]

Well hopefully you'll like Dust better. Its the next story.

[ernesth100]

And thats exactly why it's a one-shot. Other than that thanks for the honesty. Just got one more story to post then it's done(feel free to thank god).

[ernesth100]

So hey I entered another one shot. It's from a series I did a long time ago but never got to finish.

[GodzillaFreak99]

Still needs work points for having Naruto and Iron-man in there though. but yeah, keep working on it.

[ernesth100]

How does this short story sound. This one I only put in points of how the story unfolds on a basic level. In other words its more of a cronologically(did i spell that right) ordered list than a story.

http://www.newyorker.com/fiction/featur ... millhauser

-Dust accumalates to ankle height.
-Soon a blizzard ensues in the middle of summer a blizzard of dust.
-People evacuate, eventually being forced to evacuate after state is quarentined and a large portion of the state.
-A week later a hurricane insues lasting 38 hours. scattering the dust across the country and endangering other areas.
-it is soon discovered that complete darkness limits multiplying dust and eventually kills it.The world puts its resources into making giant metal domes to cover areas and destroy dust.
-It works as any left over dust is sucked up and burned.
-However somewhere some high on a mountain range bathed in light. The dust multiplies unexpectedly. End.

[ernesth100]

New One Shot. My first attempt at an emotional/documentary type story.

The Life of A Collector.
Sypnosis: Young David Ludo begins the life cycle of a collector.

Enjoy, and please voice your opinions here.

[ernesth100]

New One Shot, I don't wanna spoil to much. But think, Anti-Smoking Campaign meets Walking Dead in a Rated R story. Right Here: http://tohokingdom.com/forum/viewtopic. ... 3#p1208163

[ernesth100]

I have made a reboot of Smokers Apocolypse. I have four more stories planned for the series. One focusing on each character, including Timmy again. And finally a story where they reunite to take on a massive evil together.