Godzilla vs Gaira Discussion

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Godzilla vs Gaira Discussion

Postby pta917 » Tue Jul 17, 2012 4:20 am

After reading Godzilla vs Gaira ( viewtopic.php?f=18&t=10456 ) you can say what you think of it and ask anything you want about it.
I know that the kaiju aren´t like there original versions but it's fiction.
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Re: Godzilla vs Gaira Discussion

Postby Kubo » Wed Jul 18, 2012 11:39 am

Eh, motivation for fighting and such isn't really explained, and it's rather brief. Try to improve your writing by being more descriptive. Figurative language is a good start.
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Re: Godzilla vs Gaira Discussion

Postby pta917 » Wed Jul 18, 2012 12:13 pm

It was my first, I need to improve my tecnic.
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